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IammyaspectofUs
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Posted 09/08/06 - 5:08 PM:
Subject: we have condemned him, again
Bring on the crowds of patriots for the battle has been won!

The gallows are set on high, and the wretched has been strung.

Bring you women and children to see the evil man on display today


But look not into his eyes for in this deed we let love not have a home.

For the sake of our deeds to be fair, to label them just in our own eyes,

This man must be slain, he must die to give life to our illusions of just.

There is nothing else to do save this and for our survival and we must
Take the life of our brother to keep our crimes from our own trial.
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Posted 09/08/06 - 6:22 PM:

a strong and solid piece, iammy. poignant words coupled with good rhythm and flow. my favorite of your poetic works!

excellent,
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IammyaspectofUs
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Posted 09/08/06 - 10:33 PM:

Thanx lib.

Is it really that good?

It was hurting when I wrote itcrying I guesse thats what it take eh?
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Posted 09/08/06 - 10:42 PM:

it's awesome. i love the title, too. at first, it makes me want to know what this guy's story is, but then, it feels like the poem tells you all you really need to know. everything that matters is right there.
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Posted 09/10/06 - 12:40 PM:



Nice.

Nothing like a little gut wrenching misery to grant insight or creativity.
IammyaspectofUs
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Posted 09/10/06 - 3:05 PM:

I am finally and free to be


I am in love with everyone, the people of the crowd.

Lost are my efforts of trying for right and wrong,

I stand looking and wonder why this hurts them so.

There are so many faces, and ancient stories in them.

I am not tired; I am not sore, not sick anymore, I,

Fear is gone, I can’t find it, I’m comfortably naked

I am small behind my eyes, clear , so real, and still
Everyone’s eyes light up, I am falling, click
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Posted 09/10/06 - 4:43 PM:

Really I like your poems as the give me some inside of your soul. Maybe you can collect und publish them on some please. Just keep going, I would like to read more from you. Just get them all out from under your desk. Okay

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IammyaspectofUs
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Posted 09/10/06 - 5:12 PM:

I'm sorry honey, This is the start, I have nothing under the desk.

Thank you though.

i am just trying to vent what I feeling, I guesse that Is poetry? I am the last to know what it is.

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Posted 09/10/06 - 9:45 PM:

Iammy wrote:
I am finally and free to be


I am in love with everyone, the people of the crowd.

Lost are my efforts of trying for right and wrong,

I stand looking and wonder why this hurts them so.

There are so many faces, and ancient stories in them.

I am not tired; I am not sore, not sick anymore, I,

Fear is gone, I can’t find it, I’m comfortably naked

I am small behind my eyes, clear , so real, and still
Everyone’s eyes light up, I am falling, click

beautiful
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