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Long roads to lonely places

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OxygenJunkie
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Posted 06/09/06 - 3:19 PM:
Subject: Long roads to lonely places
I walk streets on which illusion is assassinated
Where darker shades of the human life are painted
Here children draw tatoos of oblivion in their conscience
Stings of the needle as scars of denied existence
No tomorrow is foreseen just the fake of today
They are not delusional contrary to what some say
They have simply lost a conviction in the human way
Made of all the lies that we speak always everyday.

We speak of compassion
We talk of empathy
And place these limits
To better define our community

I walk streets on which illusion is assassinated
Here it is a refuge for the outcasts violated
By these false promises only men can conceive
To better isolate the masses they deceive
Here live minor prostitutes and dirty little things
A price is set on fallen angels with broken wings
Cast aside for the purpouse of our benevolence
Left to rely on basic instinctive violence.

But they are out of touch?
They don't know what's real?
Have we forgotten who they were
Humans just like us...

I'm going nowhere and yet feeling like I'm late
Stuck between these notions called faith and fate
I know that too many times I've been left to hesitate
On these long roads to lonely places
Why does the ideal of peace leave me so irate
When one speaks of unity to define what separates
Humanity was built on too many names without faces
And left me travelling long roads to lonely places


I so want to hope
I so want to believe
To believe in hope itself
Make a dream stronger than truth...

I'm going nowhere and yet feeling like I'm late
Stuck between these notions called faith and fate
I know that too many times I've been left to hesitate
On these long roads to lonely places
Why does the ideal of peace leave me so irate
When one speaks of unity to define what separates
Humanity was built on too many names without faces
And left me travelling long roads to lonely places
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Posted 06/09/06 - 6:21 PM:

Francois,

"Long roads to lonely places"

That is an unforgettable line, and it is backed up in your poem by powerful and effective imagery . Your poem is a slam winner in my opinion.

I'm going to read it again, probably many times.

Good on you.

e cool
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Posted 06/09/06 - 6:51 PM:

thats all real.

I have usually scoffed at the word humane for the knowledge that this poem portrays. Not for the meaning of it. but for the naming of the word that was used.
We only do better than animals because we are smarter. We still play by all the same rules in life and treat all in our world as animals.

Morals are like money, they can be too expesive for the poor to afford all the time, and the rich tend to only use them in there own neighborhoods.
Doug Taylor

Did you write those verses Oxy?
I will print them out and hang them on my wall.



Edited by IammyaspectofUs on 06/11/06 - 2:22 PM. Reason: because
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Posted 06/14/06 - 11:48 AM:

my favorite line is "too many names without faces"; amen to that.
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