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libertygrl
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Posted 01/03/06 - 10:49 PM:
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a little rain in my hair
spills thoughts to my pillow,
where have they been?
looking out, spinning round,
round like a clock,
click, click, click,
like a combination lock
where does it stop?

here.

here,
a little rain in my hair
spills shouts to my soul,
you are whole!
you are whole!

do i need to get back
to lick the addiction,
to stick the affliction
with a proper inscription?
what's on the other side
of an unsimple memory
of me holding onto him
holding me in the rain?
i couldn't even point to the pain,
from where i was, then. here i am, now,
so long every moment filled with rage
leaving me in time,
leaving me in time.

a little rain in my hair
spills words to the page
libertygrl
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Posted 04/01/06 - 5:01 PM:

devotion to a notion
that comes for a day
and never goes away,
oceans here to stay;
a potion
to slow
the flow
motion,
is one to speed it up
like tokens in a paper cup
like a song full of birds
remembering the sky
from the world that was
and making it so,
making it so...
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Posted 04/02/06 - 5:30 AM:

Wow, you two! They were terrific rap poems. I've tried to do rap but it is so-o-o difficult. Yours have inspired me to try again.

Admiringly, JuneBug clap clap clap








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Posted 04/05/06 - 1:01 PM:

thanks, JB smiling face
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Posted 05/26/06 - 5:01 PM:

I quite enjoyed the metaphor of raindrops
how they remind of a past and its thoughts
you express with beauty what makes you suffer
and these words are simple to decypher
and it is through this elegant simplicity
which does not seek to hide its honesty
that we can relate to your eloquent poetry
for it is a window into humanity.

rain, the pages, the need to somehow express an emotion which hurts you. It reminds me of a line from a different rhyme: Tears are nothing but the blood of emotions.
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Posted 05/26/06 - 5:22 PM:

thank you, oxy smiling face
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