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Monk2400
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Posted 11/13/09 - 6:00 PM:
Subject: Footless
i wish i could hear that music
again
see my friend
put off the end
of time
a fine line
drawn close
in the sand
a land
circumscribed
by dreams
that've died
bones of ideas
bleached bare
I swear
and fall to one knee as
the weight of no-thing
force me into showing
that I don't know-things
and the gap is growing
fall
like snowing
in autumn's dry leaves
now on both knees
fists grip the earth
flesh put to work
feel what they're worth
prepare for a birth
or death
either way
a breath
like a play
Simulated
contemplated
by a scribe and a pen
all too humen
and when
the curtain does sink
what will the crowd think
fetid the stink
decaying minds
broken lines
tangled vines
hidden crimes
a crescendo
crashing through windows
as wind blows
screaming
without words
without sounds
no meaning
demeaning
the honour of noble-born souls
whose aspect is much like
cake donut holes
zeros
so empty
they're full
their words are a lull
with no thoughts to mull
a terrible toll
a tool
for a fool
to use
and abuse
to excuse
and accuse
to divide
and rule
a tool
from a pool
of unending days
of devious ways
allowed by malaise
complacent
faceless
footless
and burned
stuck in the ground
the reward is well earned.

8)
libertygrl
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Posted 11/13/09 - 6:30 PM:

a great piece for spoken-word thumb up

i was listening to the cello while i was reading this, it was cool.
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Posted 11/13/09 - 11:41 PM:

It sounds great read out loud. I really like it! "So empty they're full" "no meaning demeaning the honor of noble born souls"
If you know Charly Garcia, try reading it to his "Hija de la Lagrima," the part that begins with the word "taxi," if you feel like reading with fully energized voice.. Ah--just a thought.clap
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Posted 10/06/10 - 8:29 AM:

thanks monk for all your support here at the couch, through the years, from day one. you rock.

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Posted 01/26/11 - 8:12 PM:

Hi monk,

Well done, I like this, I think this is gold.

If you wanna do this on top of some music, I'd be happy to provide the instrumentals. Here are some of my tracks, let me know if you'd be interested.

Ariel
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