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Solaine
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Solaine
Posted 11/13/09 - 3:16 PM:
Subject: Digression
Opening my eyes for the first time,
Perceive, a man-made world where chaos reigns supreme.
Imagination, the root of creation
Etched into our detrimental minds.

Time crawled on crippled but unrelenting limbs,
Never halting to gaze back,
Not at the destruction or beauty of existence,
Or at the promise of love or profusion.

Edifices born and reborn, empires fallen, risen from the ashes,
Castles that touched the sky,
Mankind;s wonderland, a myth no more,
With shadows of dark ghosts lingering in abandon.

Saw my old friend tradition whilst drifting,
Packed his bags and bid farewell, claimed he was replaced.
When I trudged back home,
Westernization moved in me, greeted me with a wicked smile.
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Posted 11/13/09 - 3:54 PM:

wow, beautiful! it's at the same time epic and yet very personal. i love the part about tradition packing his bags and bidding farewell. welcome to the couch solaine
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Posted 11/13/09 - 11:49 PM:

"Saw my old friend whilst drifting..." That's my favorite. I love it because it keeps time and place vague. Drifting: where? Old friend: how old? How interesting that that's one of the simpler lines, yet, for me, it define the poem, which (again, for me) is about a random downward drift, nobody paying enough attention.
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Posted 11/14/09 - 8:38 AM:

Impressive piece.

Welcome to the couch !

grin*wicked smile*grin
Solaine
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Solaine
Posted 11/14/09 - 10:50 AM:

Thank you!
Would love to get to know how things work around here. I could use some help. Any volunteers?
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Posted 11/14/09 - 11:42 AM:

here is a quick summary:

http://www.thecouchforum.com/comments.php?id=3
Face_of_Stone
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Posted 12/21/09 - 4:19 PM:

Your words are like a symphony to my murky soul…. very nice.
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